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The Melting Candle~ By Olfa Drid Derouiche

3/19/2014

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Like a candle day after day she melts
By his side for years and years she once dwelt
With her light, he kept growing and thriving
She's eaten up but naught he's ever felt!

Like a candle day after day she melts
He took her flame and in his torch it dwelt
To lighten all his darkening roads and caves,
And all her senses at his weird moods knelt

Like a candle day after day she melts
With all his crazes and blunders she dealt
But no complaints and not a single blame
Her heart was burnt, its smoke he's never smelt

Like a candle day after day she melts
She was that dreamer; charming, fresh and svelte
But now she's sinking in her pool of wax
Shapeless, soulless and denied a life belt.


Author Bio:
Olfa Drid Derouiche is a Tunisian English teacher, a PhD scholar and a seed of a writer/ thinker who has just ripened and flowered along the school of life. Once called a “wise writer whose passion is meditation at the ailments of the human race and whose utter target of poetry medium is to trigger the minds of readers, stimulate previously silenced thoughts and question given-for-granted facts.” One of her 'HEART’ poems was published in The Poet Sanctuary's Anthology of poetry: Patchwork Musings (2009). 
15 Comments
Chaouki M'kaddem link
3/19/2014 06:54:27 am

Congratulations dear Olfa! You tackled the gender issue artfully. I can see an amazing painting through your well-knitted poem! Bravo!

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Faten arfaoui
3/19/2014 06:58:36 pm

My dear Teacher and friend Olfa,
Congrats! I can see your words a nice image or a painting. I enjoyed the last part very well said !

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Chastity Imes
3/19/2014 07:19:14 pm

Amazing Poem !

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Lamjed Labidi
3/20/2014 05:54:57 am

A candle consumes itself to light the way for others...

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Cynthia Ferguson-Morris
3/20/2014 02:44:14 pm

An interesting perspective on what I presume is the lot in life of many spouses (or as I call them: SPICE) of artists. Frieda Lawrence cuckolded D. H. as much as he, she. I'll have to check out the rest of your files. Your brief bio intrigues me too entirely much. Namaste.

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Abdelwaheb Dhaou link
3/20/2014 08:28:58 pm

I wholeheartedly rejoiced at the set of images,structure and caboodle of words you skillfully articulated to revive an issue as burning as gender equality in your sublime way ! Go ahead,please your enchanting poems are here to enlighten our days. Thank you dear madam !

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Ahmed Mehdi
3/20/2014 09:27:59 pm

Wonderful, dear Mrs Olfa ! Congratulations on such a " fine piece of Jewelry" " a masterpiece" I find it like " a diamond ornamenting a poerty necklace " I am really proud of you! Keep shining dear fellow poetess!

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Sana Ben Mustapha
3/20/2014 11:00:08 pm

Congratulations dear friend! It's raining artfulness!!!symphonic reality..I adore your style!

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Imen Belhaj Jrad
3/20/2014 11:00:09 pm

The poem is amazing, great Olfa :) I like it so much so that I kept reading it :) the portrayal is outstanding as well !!

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Lotfi Ben Zaida
3/20/2014 11:07:39 pm

Congratulations dear colleague and sister! A real masterpiece in terms of topic , techniques and artistic features! Keep shining!

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aroui med fethi
3/20/2014 11:46:21 pm

Sincerity is one of the criteria with which we judge whether a poem is good or not.There a great deal of sincerity in your verse.Your words come easy and so do your images.I like the paradox in the image where candles melt in day time rather than at night.As for the final line,I'd rather use life boat as tou're talking of sinking,without affecting the rhyme scheme.I's a nice poem about womanish selfsacrifice and man's ingratitude.Go ahead and spread beauty in a world full of ugliness!

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Cynthia Sharp link
3/21/2014 07:11:37 am

What a beautiful poem and site!

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Hassen gara
3/23/2014 04:16:27 am

lovely poem .Interesting topic dealing with gender equality , women afflicted with unhappiness , pain , ill-treatment.I liked the metaphor, the woman is compared to a candle that burns itself to give light..Great sacrifice , and altruism with no appreciation , recognition or reward .Keep up being creative .

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JAMES GILMARTIN CAIRNS
3/24/2014 04:58:14 am

I find it hard to comment on your poetry, Olfa, because your poetry already speaks for itself. I catch quick, sometimes unseen, glimmers of you within it, and darting reflections of ourselves in the mirror mosaic of words that have tumbled through time into your mind. The pieces of the mosaic are lovingly and carefully put together to form a coherent picture, a poem. The work is stupendous, the mosaic complex. We have to stand back and contemplate, then go back and look into the detail to see the detail with which it has been crafted.

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Sameh drid
3/26/2014 05:01:26 am

Congratulations sister.I m proud of you.

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